When I came here, I was surprised by American lifestyle, taste of food, culture, dressing style, and language, everything is different here, but the most surprised thing is the freedom. Freedom for every child, especially women even they are from other countries, the rules are same for every person. I had a lot of problems when I came here in the USA, the initial surprise upon entering in the USA was truly mesmerizing. It being my second ever ride outside India. Huge airports, tall buildings, wider roads, big houses and cars, and the list goes on....It seemed as if the entire world around me had got magnified, to at least twice its usual size!
In America, on gets 24-hour water supply, with both hot and cold option everywhere. The same is true for electricity as well, medical emergency service is available at the press of a button. Basic amenities are all practically guaranteed by the government to everybody.
Frankly it was a new world for me altogether. With so many amenities at one's disposal, who wouldn't feel free? Freedom from the daily "Indian" routine of travelling in over crowded shuttle bus/trains, hurrying to get the household chores done lest the power would go off, waiting for the water supply to take bath....
There is freedom of opportunity in getting admission to a school/college or getting a job.
No discrimination (neither reservation) based on sex, caste, religion, etc exists. Every teenager gets on the bread earning wagon as soon as they reaches 15 thereby becoming self dependent. American girls drive buses and trucks, play soccer alongside guys, practically do everything that boys do!
However, not everything there is all good . Else the country would become the mythical heaven. There is the "other side" to this freedom as well, as the children get on their own early, they never have the "Indian" attachments towards their parents or relatives. People have a hard life, particularly in their old age when they need their near -and -dear- ones alongside.
Marriage has become practically a "joke" there.People divorce and re-marry for petty things. The culture of single parents has crept in steadily and comprehensively.
The freedom of opportunity that non-Americans "enjoy" there is equally stark with economy down, American companies don't even allow foreign students to seek employment with them. Getting the green card and citizenship of the country has become next to impossible.
Though America might be good for earnings some quick bucks and enjoying the "good" side of freedom for a while, it's not so when it comes to settling down for life.
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i just have one question for you , did you write this by your self or some one helped you, but if you did this by your self its really great job i enjoyed reading it, your writing is excellent , again good job
Hi sweet harpreet.
You wrote a big interesting story, and gave many examples!
I found some mistakes that you need to correct. First sentence word "life style" to "lifestyle" You can trust me, because I wrote about it my own story 8)
Your topic and concluding sentence are connect the same ideas it's good! In first sentence I understand your idea and meaning, but in last sentence I don't. Can you write your concluding sentence more clearly?
I like adj.that you used like "mythical", "arty" and "comprehensive"but try to use last adj. in correct form.
And finally you must to use some of 5 senses. I didn't find anyone!
But at all it's a great work! You are good writer!
You include freedom in your first and last sentence. Are there any other ideas that you can include to connect them more?
You have some excellent ideas and you explain the very well. I think you should keep improving this assignment to submit to the ESL writing magazine for the contest!
surprised-surprising thing
every child
Look at spelling:
especially
lifestyle
rem arty
Good description of world being
magnified.
I like how you connect all of the amenities to the feeling of freedom.
as soon as they reach 15
Marriage has become practically a "joke" here.
The freedom of opportunity that non-Americans "enjoy" here.
Topic/Concluding sentences: .20 I think you can connect the them even better. If you have more questions, you can ask me.
Supporting Sentences: .20 Excellent examples. A few confusing or unnecessary sentences.
5 Senses/Vocabulary: Great! .25 Check spelling one more time.
Grammar/Punctuation: .25 Good. A few incomplete sentences.
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