Last summer I had a beautiful vacation in Florida with my family.
After almost 12 hours of driving, we arrived at the first point of the itinerary: Daytona Beach. Because we had to live somewhere we got a room at a Motel, then we went out to visit the city. On that day we got a welcome in the country of "Sunshine" with a violent storm but, the next day it was like nothing happened. We enjoyed the beach and the tall waves of the ocean, the palm trees' shadow, and the spectacular view of the town in the night.
The next stop, after we left Daytona, was Orlando. It was the most attractive place from our trip for my daughter. In the first day we went out to eat, see the surroundings, and of course shopping. We spent the following day in a wonderful environment of Disney World, at Magic Kingdom Park. It was regrettable to not have enough time to visit all the parks but, we had to move on to the next stop.
On the morning of the fifth day we left Orlando and drove toward Clear Water. The way was full of spectacular views. After we got there we were eager to see the beach. Over here the beach is well-known for its calm and warm water. We went to Honey-Moon Beach and Clear Water Beach. The ocean spoiled us with its clear water, where we found a lot of seashells, and the sunrise and the sunset impressed us.
The time went by very fast. Even though everything was lovely and beautiful as a nice dream, we had to get back to our lives. Now, it is more than half a year and I am still thinking about the beautiful time that I had in Florida my last summer vacation.
3 comments:
Hi Florea, I think you did a great job! You wrote a lot and described every days and it’s very interesting to read. I like that you connected and wrote very clearly topic and concluding sentences.
Now, it’s my turn to give for you some advices. First, your spelling is good, but not perfect. For example, vacantion --- vacation; eventhough---even though. Second, in this sentence “….nice dream, we had to get back to our lives.” I think better if you don’t use there coma. Try to use “and”, or start new sentence. Everything ells are OK!
Thank you very much for your advices! Now I saw my mistakes and improved them.
It would be nice to see some pictures. Hope you enjoy your program...all you people from different countries.
You really improved your topic and concluding sentences!
You have good transitions to help the reader follow your story.
"In that day we got a welcome in the country of "Sunshine"
" When we talk about days we use on, instead of in.
Even though is two words. (Check last two sentences)
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