Apr 11, 2007

Two Famous Figures




Many people are remembered because of the accomplishments they achieve throughout their lives. Two people who have been very influential are, Bill Clinton and Bill Gates. First of all, you will learn about the similarities among them. They are both white males from the United States. Also, they are both very important public figures. For example, Clinton served as the president of the U.S. from the year 1993 -2001, while Gates created the Microsoft Software. In addition, both of them are married, but Clinton has less kids than Gates. Bill Clinton is married to Hillary Rodham and has one daughter, and Bill Gates is married to Melinda French and has three kids, one son and two daughters. These are some of the similarities that they share.

Although these two figures have much in common they are still very different. They both had different education choices. Clinton went to school to earn a bachelor of science unlike Gates who intended to prepare for law school. The way they impacted other people was also very different. Bill Clinton was influential on people because of his way of leading the nation, as president, whereas, Bill Gates was known for his creation of the Microsoft Software. Another difference is that they were born into a very different families. Gates was born into a very wealthy family, whereas, Clinton was born into a lower-class family. In addition, they do not share the same physical appearance. Clinton has gray hair and does not wear glasses, in contrast, Gates has brown hair and always wears his glasses. Finally, their economical status' are not the same. They are both really wealthy, but Gates is a billionaire and is richer than Clinton. In conclusion, these two famous people have many differences, but nevertheless, they have both impacted the people of America through the accomplishments they have made in their lives.



References:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bill_Clinton
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bill_Gates

4 comments:

eva said...

Hi Noel

I enjoyed reading your paragraph. It is really good.
I am sure just typing error.

"Bill Clinton and Bill gates
"daughter and Bill Gates and Bill Gates is married
"whereas Bill gates was known

MURHAF said...

hi nowel. u have a nice paragraph...i think u need to put of after the year like ( the year of 1993 to the year of 2001 ) . United stated shoul be United States.

ESL Teacher said...

Topic/Concluding:
"I" is not necessary.

Supporting Ideas:
Very clear. Good information to support ideas.

The first difference seems to be education not career choices.

You should end with the strongest point, the biggest diffence or similiarity.

Transitions/Vocabulary:
character is used for someone in a book, movie, show. It is also used for a funny person. You could use men, leaders, people, figures

In fact,
Excellent transitions.
Grammar/Comparitives:

Check capitalization
from 1993-2001, while ..

Influential on people..

ESL Teacher said...

Topic/Concluding: .25 Excellent conclusion!

Supporting Ideas: .25
Very clear examples
Transitions/Vocabulary: .25
Great
Wonderful transitions between paragraphs!

Grammar/Comparatives:.25

good comparatives