Apr 24, 2007

Drugs

There are allot of problems in the world and the biggest problem now is drugs. Drugs is an illegal thing that people take for many reasons. There are many kinds of drugs like marijuana, ecstasy, cocaine and heroin these Drugs are bad for health and people keep taking them.
There are so many reasons for that, like some kids are taking drugs because they are young and they don't know what they are doing or because they want to belong to certain social groups so they have to do drugs to fit with them. Some people take drugs to numb them from their various problems like family problems or school problems so they do drugs to forget about their problems. Some other people do drugs just for fun, and If they keep doing it they get addicted to it and they just can't leave it. That's why people are taking drugs.
There are some solutions for the drugs first, we should have stronger laws and put tougher laws against drug users and drug dealers. Second, parents should take care more of their children and they should be responsible for watching their children, and keep them away from these things. Finally I think that we should have more commercials in the media about how bad is the drugs, and that's the better way that we can keep the people away from the drugs ......

8 comments:

dany said...

Hi murhaf the biggest problem is drugs.what are they doing

Noel said...

The first sentence is confuse.
In my opinion you might say( There a lot of problems in the world; one of those problems is drugs.

harpreet said...

hi you need a conclusion sentence and you need to explain more abhout causes and solution

Sara said...

Hi Murhaf I agree with Harpreet you need to explain much better the causes and solutions.

BlackRose said...

hi murhaf you need to make these changes before the class today so hurry up man ............ change the first sentese and you need conclusion one.... good luck

ESL Teacher said...

Good Outline - You need to write a whole essay.

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Noel made a good suggestion about your first sentence.

Wanda said...

Hi Murhaf
I agree with all of the comments.
I realized some spelling mistakes.

ESL Teacher said...

Topic/Concluding/Thesis .20


3 causes/3 solutions .20

3 transitions/3 new vocabulary .25

Grammar/ 3 adverb clauses .20