Insomnia is the difficulty in going to sleep or staying asleep during the night. It also consists of not feeling well rested after getting up (Sarason, 2002). According to Sarason (2002, pg. 169), "one third of the population suffers from insomnia that has occurred for more than a month". Insomnia can cause anxiety, irritability, depression, and trouble in concentrating. Those who suffer a very stressful situation or who have stress in their lives will most likely suffer from insomnia for some period of time. Insomnia is more common among older individuals and among women (Sarason, 2002). Insomnia is a sleeping disorder that effects the majority of the population at some time or another, and it is usually caused by stress.
Sarason, I. G. & Sarason, B. R. (2002). Abnormal Psychology: The Problem of Maladaptive
Behavior (10th ed.). Upper Saddle River: Pearson / Prentice Hall.
6 comments:
I think that you have to stop the topic sentence after asleep. It has not sense to write the rest.
Supporting ideas are good as well as the concluding sentence is.
Good paragraph !
hello,
nice paragraph! still though for some reason seems like you need to work on the punctuation part. Plus, I think you should start your work with this sentence first:
"Insomnia is a sleeping disorder that effects the majority of the population at some time or another, and it is usually caused by stress.
Topic sentence/Concluding Sentence:
Your concluding sentence is excellent. Can you make your first sentence more clear. It is incomplete because of "of not feeling well rested.."
Three supporting ideas:
How do you know 1/3 of population suffers from this? Do you have a source where you found the information? If you do, use according to...
Can you connect insomnia, stress, older people, and women?
Clear ideas.
Transitions/Vocabulary:
Try to connect your main ideas more.
Grammar/Adjective Clauses:
Florea,
Maybe you should check your second sentence in your comment. It does not make any sense.
Greg,
You spelled "effects" wrong. It is "affects".
Topic/Concluding: Excellent .25
3 Supporting Ideas: .25
Problem
Symptoms
Great citations of source of information!
Very clear ideas
Transition/Vocabulary: .20
Use more transitions to connect ideas together.
Try to find synonyms for insomnia.
Grammar/Adjective Clauses: .25
Your grammar is very clear and easy to understand.
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