Jan 23, 2007
My trip to Pamporovo,Bulgaria
I went to Pamporovo, Bulgaria on vacation. It was in July 2003. It was my 1-st time there. I went with my husband and our friends. We were away for six days.We drove to Pamporovo by bus. It took about thirty hours to get there from Kiev,Ukraine. We stayed in a hotel.The weather was nice. It was warm, sunny and fresh (because we were in mountains). While we were there, we had excursions,we saw some old churches and houses, we rode on cable car and swam in mountainous river. I have a small stone from this river. Once, we found the place, there strawberry are grown, when we walked.While we were there, we usually went out to eat. We tried Bulgarian food. It was delicious!I took some pictures with my camera. I bought a few souvenirs and postcards, but I didn't spend much money on my trip.The best things about my trip were mountains, forest and mountainous river (may be because I really love nature). So, I liked Pamporovo a lot. I'd really like to go there again. I had a great time!
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Hi Ira, It’s interesting story about your trip. Everything will be ok if u first, check spelling some words (It wos my 1-st time there; it was worm anf frash becouse we; when we wolked); second, don’t forget write ’I’ like ‘i’ (if i had a chance); third, use a space between ‘.’ and new sentence (“friends.We used” u need space there “friends. We used” – correct ) Finally, try to use the firs sentence like a topic sentence of you paragraph. For example, “The most memorable vocation in Pamporovo, Bulgaria.” or “The best vacation to Pamporovo that I never had before” and after when u chose the topic try to connect it with concluding sentences. U need to use the same meaning, but write another words. After that, I think your story will be perfect :)
I would love to eat fresh strawberries!
Yuriy gave you some good suggestions to improve your story. WHen you edit your story there is a small button you can click on (ABC) that will check your spelling. It is the easiest and fastest way to improve your spelling.
Also, include a topic sentence and a concluding sentence to help the person reading your story understand the topic more clearly.
You made some great changes. You give many interesting details and your topic and concluding sentences are more similiar.
Once, we found the place, there strawberry are grown, when we walked.
This sentence is a little confusing. How can you make it more clear?
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