Apr 24, 2007

Drugs and Teenagers

Drug abuse is Social evil in many countries. Billions of dollars are spent internationally preventing drug use. Drug abuse causes many problems for countries and communities. Drug use is more among in teenagers . Because adolescence is typically a period of experimentation, irrespective of parenting skills and influence. Teenagers are making habit to use illegal drugs when they are depression, Peer pressure and Causes:It is commonly believed that teenagers turn to drugs when they got depression or unhappy situations. When they are in depression and UN happy situations, they are desperately looking for temporary relief.Most of the teenagers turn to use Drugs, because of peer pressure. Teenagers having strong feelings inside to do something as their age level people does. Also bad influence from their family members. First we will see how teenagers are turn to drugs, when they depress. Teenagers are full of expectations of life in future,wen they fail to see succuss in their life, they art getting depression. So they want to escape from sad situations. Then they turn to use drugs for temporary relief. Second cause is Peer pressure. Teenagers are have strong feelings to do something thier age level people does. Finally, then they easily follow them. Generally people learn through watching others. Though they get instructions from their parents and well wishers.

Solutions:

Government is spending millions of dollars to prevent drug use and treating addicts. There are special departments are there to prevent drug use. In schools, there are counsellors, social workers , health workers and if necessary police officers also involved to prevent drug use.
The first, parents are need to observe their kids behaviour, when they are getting bad results about their studies or any behavioural problems, they counsel them and encourage them to study well. Parents should show their love when their children get depress. That action may help them to get out of from their UN Happy situations or depressed situations. The second , Parents need to encouraging their children to have more than one group of friends.
Allow your child to practise responsibility and good decision making skills from an early age.
Educate your child on the dangers of drug use. Finally, parents and members in the family should show their model life to their children.
In conclusion, although the problem of drugs may seem impossible to eliminate, there are concrete steps that can be taken to weaken the hold of drugs on society. The danger from drugs is too great to ignore.

9 comments:

dany said...

Billions of dollars are spent internationally preventing drug us.
what you mean by preventing drug us

NESRIN said...

"Especially among youngsters. we can see drug abuse causes:"
"youngsters" what does it mean? and you wrote just one cause.We need to write 3 causes,3 solutions and concluding.

NESRIN said...

Conclusion not concluding sorry.

Volha said...

Hi,Sivarao.We need to write a big paragraphaph about 20 sentences.You have only 1 cause.But I think it's not a main cause.You need to write 2 more. You have to write 3 solutions in your final sentences.Good luck!

eva said...

Hi Sivao
Especially among youngsters.
You don’t have verb in this sentence.
youngsters. we can (. We )
Tray to develop your idea

Sara said...

Hi Sivarao you need to write 20 sentences don't forget it.

Yura said...

Hi Sivarao, I thing you should change your topic if you can't write outline for your causes and solutions. Let's try another one such as Alcoholism and Teenagers :)

ESL Teacher said...

Topic/Concluding/Thesis:
Good introduction. Your last sentence in the first paragraph needs to be a thesis statement that includes your three causes and solutions.

Restate steps in conclusion.

Causes/Solutions:
more common among teenagers because..

You don't need headings for paragraphs, but you can change them to topic sentences. For example, One cause for teenagers to take drugs is depression.

You don't need to list three causes and then talk about them later in the paragraph. Say one cause and add information. State another cause add information. etc

It seems like all of your solutions relate to parents. If theat is true, then why do you talk about governments and schools. Clearly say three solutions.

Transitions/Vocabulary:
rife? I don't know this world. Some suggestions:
rising, increasing, is a problem?

First,
Second,
Grammar/Adverb Clauses:

ESL Teacher said...

Topic/Concluding/Thesis .20


3 causes/3 solutions .20

3 transitions/3 new vocabulary .25

Grammar/ 3 adverb clauses .15