Apr 26, 2007

Alcocholism

Alcoholism is a big problem for some people in all world. The bad habits often begin innocently. He or she begins to drink a little alcohol and then more frequently and don't notice when they are drunk. Intoxicated person ruins their health and destroy other's life. If people drink alcohol, they get nervous and quickly become burden for family and community.People run to alcohol, because they don't see another way to solve problems.
People often drink alcohol, because they want to escape from reality. When they have a problem ,they think that alcohol will help them. More reasons way people turn to drinking alcohol are stress, a lot of work, breaking up relationships and other difficulties come across their way.
In order to solve this issue, the person must really want to quit drinking alcohol. They must reach for help that their close one's are offering. For those who are alone with this problem , there is always the community, for example "Alcoholic Anonymous". Another way to overcome alcohol addiction is to find a hobby, such as sport, music, books.
People need to know that drunkenness is a very bad habit and brings a lot of problems that they should quickly overcome. To be a success in loosing a bad habit, one must be really strong, and accept the help from people.

3 comments:

Margaret said...

At first you should write a definition about alcoholism in general

ESL Teacher said...

Topic/Concluding/Thesis:
second sentence is unclear. often begin innocently..(instead of commence not guilty)
First paragraph, last sentence should tell the reader that you are going to discuss causes and solutions of problem.

Confusing grammar in concluding sentence. You need to repeat the causes and solutions in conclusion to summarize.

Causes/Solutions:
Great!Good examples.

Transitions/Vocabulary:
spiritous - drunk
lonesome is an adjective - I think you mean alone.
going out - to overcome
to find a hobby
Grammar/Adverb Clauses:
Other reasons why people..

Can you underline 3 transitions, 3 new vocabulary words, and 3 adverb clauses?

ESL Teacher said...

Topic/Concluding/Thesis .20


3 causes/3 solutions .20

3 transitions/3 new vocabulary .25

Grammar/ 3 adverb clauses .20