Online chat is a way that people can communicate in an informal conversation which uses computers and Internet. You can chat there in different ways that include text messages, a voice chat and rarely a video conversation. Those ways to communicate are more popular and useful than to use telegrams. The most important thing is that it is absolutely free, without any charge. People who usually use the Internet often use online chat. In addition, you share information much faster. This is an interesting and fun way to spend your free time, where you can discuss some topics and sometimes make new friends.
5 comments:
"This does that way" to ....(I think some things wrong grammar ".."here)
I think that online chat it is
a lot of fun .
Topic sentence/Concluding:
a way that..which uses
good definition
3 supporting ideas
Your ideas are clear, but I think they can connect better to make the whole paragraph more clear.
connect "those ways" to the list of ways by putting that sentence after your second sentence.
without any charge
Transitions/Vocabulary
Good use of those and this
absolutely free
without any charge
Grammar/Adjective clauses:
good clauses
Yura I love your paragraph. Thank you for your comment about my paragraph,but I know that I have to change everything, Emily told me it.
Topic/Concluding: .25 Excellent
3 Supporting Ideas: .15
All of your ideas are very clear.
ways
useful
free
online chat
faster
interesting and fun
You have many ideas, try to focus on three and make them strong and logically connected.
Usually, the most important idea goes at the end of a paragraph.
Transition/Vocabulary: .25
Good use of those/this
Grammar/Adjective Clauses: .20
Good clauses
the Internet
change of subject from people in general to you.
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