A nail salon is a popular place where people who like beauty go to have manicures and pedicures. There are many ways to make the nail more beautiful. Technician who work at nails shop can make many kind of nails.
The first thing which people like to do best is full set. To person, who doesn't have long nails , employees can built them up. They put a tip on each finger. And then they use acrylic and special liquid to help the nail harder. After that they sharpen them square or round to look pretty.
The second called over-lay. Some people have soft nails, they come to nail salon to get harder nails. They can get over lay on their own nails by the same way up but no tip on. Then they get air-brush or polish nails.
Beside that, they can get some things which is designed on their nail make their nails more pretty. Employees can design by air-brush or by hand which called nails-art.
The basic service of salon nails usually do is manicures and pedicures. In this case, both man and woman can get their nails and toes done. She or he cleans customer's nails or toes up by the way cut cuticle of each one. At that time ,they relax hold body like spa salon with masagess machine. Then they get polish on their own nails or whatever they want.
Most of people almost like beauty. Among them woman is the best who likes beauty. They beautify their body with clothes, make up, hair or their nail. Nail salon is one of beauty salons which beautify for woman or man.
7 comments:
I think that nail salon is very
popular place .
I suggest you to check sentence;
'Among that '
in my opinion should be
'Among them'
Your paragraph has many interesting facts about nail salons. But maybe you should make it a little shorter. Check some grammar. For example, your first sentence is confusing. I would suggest writing "Almost all people like beauty."
do not use constrution's and check spaces after period
I like your paragraph is very interesting. please check your grammar.
Topic sentence/Concluding Sentence:
Most people like beauty. This is not a definition.
Example:
A nail salon is a popular place where people who like beauty go to have manicures and pedicures.
Three supporting ideas:
You include three ideas, but try to make them more clear by using transitions(first, second...
Many kinds of nails
Make nails long
Harder nails
Designs
Transitions/Vocabulary:
Then they use one kind of fake nails
No comma after that they sharpen.
Grammar/Adjective Clauses:
Having many ways to make the nail more beautiful (incomplete)
Topic/Concluding Sentences: .25 Great changes. Very clear
3 Supporting Ideas: .20
You only need three ideas for this paragraph and they can be 1-2 sentences each. This would be a great example of a 3 paragraph essay!
Transitions/Vocabulary: .20
I learned new vocabulary!
Second or The second thing is called over-lay.
help the nail be harder or help the nail to harden
Grammar/Adjective Clauses: .25
Excellent adjective clauses!
A technician who works
can build them up
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