Jogging is a form of exercise very popular among people who enjoy
to spend active time outside. According to wikipedia.com this form
of exercise originated in England in the mid seventeenth century.
In 1962 year Bill Bowerman brought the concept of jogging as exercise to
the United States from New Zealand. This form of running became quite
popular among many people at that time. At these days jogging is still one of the most popular exercise throughout the United States. Jogging
is a lot of fun and gives better physical condition, and the other health
benefits. It can help with weight loss, fighting aging and stress. People
who regularly jogging get their heart and lungs in shape.
Jogging is a healthy habit and great for solving problems which are
carry everyday life.
to spend active time outside. According to wikipedia.com this form
of exercise originated in England in the mid seventeenth century.
In 1962 year Bill Bowerman brought the concept of jogging as exercise to
the United States from New Zealand. This form of running became quite
popular among many people at that time. At these days jogging is still one of the most popular exercise throughout the United States. Jogging
is a lot of fun and gives better physical condition, and the other health
benefits. It can help with weight loss, fighting aging and stress. People
who regularly jogging get their heart and lungs in shape.
Jogging is a healthy habit and great for solving problems which are
carry everyday life.
5 comments:
Hi!
I enjoy reading your paragraph, because it's close to me - I like go jogging very much.
I think you made good topic and concluding sentences,
but you can add one more an adjective clause in your 1st sentence: "Jogging is a form of exercise that very popular among people...";
also corect some sentence where words scattered, because it's difficult to read.
Good luck!
Hi!
I like your paragraph. My opinion is to check the last sentence and the commas.
I like your topic. You may want to check your structure of your paragraph. A paragraph consists of at least five sentences written in a proper style, not the way you have it written.
Topic/Concluding Sentence: .25
Clear definition in your own words. Good job.
- Check grammar
3 Supporting Ideas: .25
Good use of citation
History
Popular
Healthy
I think you could connect your second and third idea even more. Jogging is popular because it is fun and improves health..
Transitions/Vocabulary: .20
These days
Good use of this/these
Try to find a synonym for popular.
Grammar/Adjective Clauses: .15
Nice adjective clauses
check grammar in topic and concluding sentences
popular forms of exercise
go jogging
Jogging is a form of exercise very popular among people who enjoy
to spend active time outside
it should be.
exercise. That is very.
among of people
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