Feb 25, 2007

My dream to be an accountant

To earn an Associates Degree in Accounting I have to accomplish a few things.
First, and most important thing is to learn English, to be able to read, write and communicate.
Next, I have to take College Composition 1.
Third, but not less important is Math. I have to finish successfully Math 1200.
After that, I have to take a computer class.
Than, I could start the really accounting classes:
"- Financial Accounting
- Accounting with Computer Applications
- Managerial Accounting
- Cost Accounting....."
I have to finish about 60 semester hours with a G.P.A. not less than 2.00.
Finally, if I achieve all this requirements, I will be able to graduate and earn an Associates Degree in Accounting.
I hope, with a lot of work, I will be able to accomplish my goal.

6 comments:

Yura said...
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FLOREA said...

You have a grate goal. I hope you will become what you want.
The paragraph is good and you write it very clear.
As advices:
- College Composition 1 is enough;
- "60 semester hours" - I think you mean 60 credits hour.
GOOD WORK !!!!!
Sincerely,
Florea

katy said...

hi eva,thank for your comment.I have some advises for you:
You use first and third ,I think U should not use next.you use second it is better.

rudina said...

Eva, starting from the title ,it is easy to understand your topic sentence.All the sentences are in order step by step and are connected with the topic.

ESL Teacher said...

Your title is okay, but you are missing an accountant

Good introduction and conclusion.

First, and most important, I have to learn English...

Unless you give the specific class name or it is a language class (i.e. College Composition 1 or English), classes are not capitalized.

After that, ...

Then...

these requirements, I will be able to graduate and earn an Associates Degree in Accounting.

ESL Teacher said...

Topic/Concluding Sentence:.25


Supporting Sentences: Very clear.25


Transitions/Vocabuary: .20
Then not than
real not really
these not this


Grammar/Punctuation: .25