I enjoy medicine a lot and I'd like to work in it. Although, it was difficult for me to chose sphere of medicine where I'd like to work, because I don't really like to see on bl00d. When I was pregnant, I have my ultrasound done. At that moment I thought - I' d like to do it and I could do it! So, I have decided to become a sonographer.
Now I'd like to show you the steps involved in the process:
At the beginning, I must know and speak English well and complete English 1010 with "C" or higher.
After that, I have to take general subjects before program: Anatomy and Physiology, Applied Algebra and Mathematical Reasoning, Physical Concepts in Diagnostic Sonography, Medical Terminology. Also complete them with "C" grade or higher.
Then, I'm going to have practice - 2-4 hour observation where I could shadow a credentialed sonographer in their work environment.
After acceptance into program and prior to clinical assignment, I'm going to submit evidence of good health by fulfilling health requirements of Diagnostic Medical Sonography Program.
Next, I am going to study just Program . I mean - concrete subjects for my future speciality. It takes me four semesters plus one summer semester.
Finally, I 'm going to take the national credentialing exam of Diagnostic Medical Sonography of specialty option. My option is going to be - Obstetrical /gynecological sonography.
After these steps I'm going to get diploma of Sonographer. Moreover, I could get desired job - do ultrasound for a pregnant women!
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You wrote very well.I Also want to become a sonographer ,if i need to change anything or any advise please give me.Wish you a good luck.
Hi Iryna!
You wrote a good paragragh and you have a nice goal. Let me give you some comments:
I think it is better to say "How to become a Sonogragher" (use an article).
Check punctuation in your topic sentence. Why do you use "then" in the beginning of your topic sentence? It is a bit confusing.
Try to use more transition words (first, second ...).
Your sentence "... I'm going to submit evidence of good half by fulfilling..." is a bit confusing. Probable you wanted to wrire "good health" not "good half".
If you have the questions about my comments, write be back. Good luck!!!
Now I'd like to show you my steps involved in this process.
Now I'd like to show you, the steps involved in the process.
Lets go throw the steps in the process
I am glad that you were able to find the information you needed to become a sonographer. It looks like you have a clear plan. Here are some suggestions to improve your paragraph.
Avoid contractions in formal writing.
Use words instead of numbers for transitions and make sure that all of your sentences are complete (i.e. I need to complete English 1010 with a "C" or higher
Take overall subjects. Overall is confusing. Do you mean general subjects? These courses are specific to your major, and wouldn't be considered general courses. Can you explain more?
Only DMS Program takes me four semesters plus one summer semester;
The order of words in this sentence makes it confusing. Can you make it more clear?
A suggested conclusion:
After these steps, I will become a sonographer
Topic/Concluding Sentence: .20 You could connect your topic sentence and concluding sentence a little more. You don't need a full paragraph to introduce your topic for this assignment, but you will at the end of the semester.
Supporting Sentences: .20 Good Some sentences are still a little unclear.
Transitions/Vocabuary: Great .25
No comma after then
Grammar/Punctuation: .15
Good compound sentences
I had my ultrasound done
Some incomplete sentences
Avoid contractions
pregnant women (plural) no a necessary
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