Some day I would like to be an Elementary School Teacher.
First, I have to take some English classes to improve my English. My spoken and written English must be excellent.
Next, I have to do a general Maths test. It depends on my results if I will do any general math's class. These are general specific steps in the College before starting the studies in teaching.
Then, I have to do classes in science, history, phyciology, art, and general skill of education,maths. During this time, I must do 80 hours as a voluntary teacher in public school.
Finally, I will fill the aplications and have wait for an interview for starting my prefer job here. For this final step must help me College or Board of Education.
I think if I will try to study hard and seriously, someday, not far, I will be an elementary school teacher. Every dream here becomes a reality.
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Hello Rudina, I want to give you some suggestions to improve your writing in this paragrafs.
- When you use transition expressions (FIRST, NEXT) at the beginning of a sentence, it is fallowed be a comma.
- Try to read again what you wrote, and to check spelling (e practisev, c lass)
- In sentence “I have to do any general maths c lass.” Better to use “some”, because we use “any” in most negative statements and questions; “some” in affirmative statements or you can write “I don’t have to do any general math’s classes” in depend what you mean.
- When you use pronouns + contractions of "will" use it like “I’ll” not “Iwill”
- “starting here my dream job”
- “I think if I try to work hard and seriously, some day…” When you use a future conditional sentence, use the simple present tense in the “if” cause.
I wish you good luck in your dream job!
Hi Rudina
I think "Elementary School Teacher" is better.
I like your composition.
Hi rudina,You choose great goal.Check once agian 80 hours or 80 credit hours.
sivarao pedavada
Hi Rudina!
I just read you topic and I'd like to say you - nice optimistic job!
But let me give you a couple recommendations for impruve your topic:
1 - I think it sounded better, using "complete" instead "do" in sentences. For exemple:"I have to complete a general Math's test"
2 - "I have to do classes in science, history, phyciology, art, and general skill of education,maths." - 1) put "and" before last enumerator; 2)add ending "s" to "skill"; 3) but math - without ending "s";
3 - "For this final step must help me College or Board of Education." - not really good building this sentence - I think will be better -For this final step College or Board of Education must help me.
Good luck!
Topic/Concluding Sentence:
Good topic. Check the following:
"any day, not far, I will be an elementary school" any day is confusing. I think you mean someday
Supporting Sentences:
These are general specific steps in this College. Confusing
Transitions/Vocabuary: Good transitions
math test
math classes
psychology
Can you think of another word for do in this sentence?
"I can do a resume"
Grammar/Punctuation:
check space between during this time and the comma
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